Sorry for my lack of clarity– I was trying to emphasize how well you inverted the natural order by making it day (and dawn) that are cluttering up the night, and dusk the first signs of cleaning. How often I think of it in opposite terms! I really love this haiku! 🙂
My Word,
You were clear. I just thought perhaps that was an actual “form” of haiku. I’m rather haiku-less when it comes to form & function.
And thank you so much for the “love”! Coming from you that’s a real compliment.
Haha, wonderful pun there! Hmm…I think perhaps a “reverse-engineered haiku” (if it really WAS a form) would perhaps be three lines of 7-5-7 syllables? Or maybe would be written backwards? Hmm…might have to try one of those out. You’re quite welcome–your haiku are consistently great, but this one is one of my favorites! And thank you for your kind words in return–they mean a lot to me. 😀
very lyrical
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What an awesome metaphor! Superb!
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“dusting off the light to uncover dusk”, conjures up a lovely image…wonderfully crafted Haiku
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Very original and a joy to read x
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“night dusts off the light” is good! I can picture it so well. Intriguing enough 🙂
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How beautifully you have welcomed dusk through your word..
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nice.. very peaceful
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lovely photo and amusing imagery in the words! christine
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Love the image when dusk is uncovered. I mean I could only imagine ;p
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Perfect picture and poem 🙂
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captivatingly beautiful
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Dusk is dusty. Very nice image. Moi also takes nice pics.
Alice
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great picture! Have to agree with the other comments – night dusts off the light – great line!
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“layered by the dawn of day” is my favorite line. Great job!
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Interesting imagery here. 🙂
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beautiful, both picture and haiku!
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Love the opening line — such a lovely image in 17 syllables!! 😀
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What a beautiful haiku full of the wonder of the sky!
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Very thoughtful and creative imagination!
Beautiful haiku Judith 🙂
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Beautifully reverse-engineered haiku! What a wonderful image you present with your words 🙂
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Wordcoaster: Please tell me what a reverse-engineered haiku is. I truly don’t know!
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Sorry for my lack of clarity– I was trying to emphasize how well you inverted the natural order by making it day (and dawn) that are cluttering up the night, and dusk the first signs of cleaning. How often I think of it in opposite terms! I really love this haiku! 🙂
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My Word,
You were clear. I just thought perhaps that was an actual “form” of haiku. I’m rather haiku-less when it comes to form & function.
And thank you so much for the “love”! Coming from you that’s a real compliment.
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Haha, wonderful pun there! Hmm…I think perhaps a “reverse-engineered haiku” (if it really WAS a form) would perhaps be three lines of 7-5-7 syllables? Or maybe would be written backwards? Hmm…might have to try one of those out. You’re quite welcome–your haiku are consistently great, but this one is one of my favorites! And thank you for your kind words in return–they mean a lot to me. 😀
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Exquisite image Judith!
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Beautiful Judy! and the photo is enticing
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Night dusting off light is a clever twist of the usual way of expressing it! Normally it’s the day encroaching into the night! Nicely Judith!
Hank
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This was stunning in it’s wonderful poetic-ness!! LOVED it!!
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Love that it was not about snot. Beautiful image, words to match.
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Laurie,
It’snot about snot.
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Loved the process of the coming dusk in this. Nice one.
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I just love the image of night dusting off the light.!!!Thanks for this one!!
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Love the emotive description in the first line of night dusting off the light! Beautiful!
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